Tuesday, May 24, 2011

Final Prject Essay!

Blogging is such a unique tool that we should learn to use.  The various posts we write up to the different styles of what we can choose from are just some of these unique futures. Blogger, one of the many ways people blog, is the path we use to get this blogging experience. Blogging about subjects is a way for us to become better and up to date on events occurring in the world. This will help me become stronger in my language and also, more persistent in my speech.  I have not only discovered that writing is a joy, but i have found new ways to express myself in it.

I feel that blogging about a given subject has allowed me to become a more skillful writer. As we can see in the example below, i have matured enough to write about a topic that may be seen as confusing. Here, i wrote when humanity took a turn for the worst by selecting a tribal leader. “Well, I think we messed up, big time. I think it stared to go bad when we first elected the first tribal leader. Some say that we need a leader but i think that was our major and ultimate defeat. Egalitarian. That basically means in a crude and understated way equal.” Here, i explain that it is important to keep everybody equal and how that helps is by making the tribe step up to the plate. I wrote about his topic because it was once a discussion of dinner. We talked and I took mental note about it then dispensed these through my blog. Blogging helps this mature writer inside of me come out.

Another `way that blogging has improved in me is that i am now able to be more self
Confident in my writing. What i mean by this is simple. I wrote about personal experiences in my vignette project for a school assignment. I wrote about my life; how my brother and mother where and still are sick. I wrote about my true life, instead of some character “The last part of eighth grade was hell. God does things for reasons we cannot explain. I don’t understand and I wish I did. If I knew that, I could explain global warming, or why we still have not found a cure for cancer. I do not understand why people go starving every day and yet people can spend billions of dollars on birthday parties.”
There are so many things humans do that are not good for other humans. For instance, as some privileged Americans are living the good life, my mom and my brother both suffer. This is not right. Here, i write about my mom, and i strongly say that she has autoimmune disease. “My mom is that last person that should get sick. Ever. She is a trooper among troopers.
My mom has an autoimmune disease.” here, i wrote about the incurable disease known as autoimmune disease. This was very hard to right about seeing as my mom is very sick and yet, she will never get better. I think that this was a step in blogging experience that needed to be done. I am glad that i wrote about this. Also, blogger helps me cope with things that might be too hard to say in real life. For instance, the quote above is one from a personal vignette project.

Blogger is an awesome tool that allows me to become freer in my writing. I feel that the blog has made me open and free, like in 6th grade where we had passing time to get from one period to the other. Blogging has definitely made me more independent. Besides all this, blogger is fun. I have really grown to like blogger. For instance, i have used this to talk about serious matters (like the one above) and like this one, where all i talked about was friends. “So my best friend ever, Kathryn, she loves this guy named Edward Eric. So for all you anime love in anime club sorry but Edward is taken. You all should remember Kathryn because she shadowed me last Monday. So for all you people that don't know about Full metal Alchemist here is the best of it.”Here, i talked about how one of my friends is in love with this fictional character. Here’s another quote from the Sam random post. “All around the ride is stuffy and sink with old corn dogs, sail nachos, and sticky cotton candy. The railing is sticky and greasy from little children and their cotton covered hands. Impatient parents swiftly gave their bratty children a nasty look. However, the children just simply disregard the look and continue to be pests. Eager customers wait with impatience as the line moves an inch every two to three minutes. The person on the speaker (hardly loud at all because it was deeply muffled by the crowd) said something along the lines of "PLEASE DO NOT STAND, SIT, WALK ON THE RAILING. PLEASE STAY CALM ON THE RIDE. KEEP YOUR HANDS AND FEET IN THE RIDE AT ALL TIMES. THANK YOU AND ENJOY YOUR RIDE."” here, i was starting a story but eventually, just wrote about friends. See, with blogger, i have become more independent as a thinker and more skilled as a writer.

Freedom with blogging is unique. You are allowed to write about opinions. Here, i had to write a debate opener, “Between all these things above, I think that the most persuasive one was the definition of an elite college. This really made me believe what he was saying because he actually had the thought process. In anthropology, anthropologists should always site where they come from that can somehow have a negative effect on the outcome of whatever they are doing.” see, here, i wrote about an opinion that was eventually used in an online debate we had. I use these posts to form ideas during class. Also, this is a great way to find out new information that i did not know about. Like, the assignments where Mr. Sutherland would make us review another’s blog.

        However, it has become apparent that my blogging has been lagging. For instance, i would do so poorly on a blog, it seemed that i had an 8 year old witting them! The above is all true; blogging has matured me as a writer, and has made more self-confident. But, in the overall picture, i have become lazy in my posts. I show hardly any efforts to make them worth the while. It needs to improve and in order to do that, i have made some goals. First of all, i would like to make more time dedicated to reading and writing a response to the reading. I would like to start this during the summer. Another goal for me would be to read more. (Both of these goals go hand in hand). When i stat all this, then i will be more able to write at a higher level than i am now.

To conclude, blogger has changed my life as a writer and as an independent thinker. It has opened my mind so that i am able to work harder than before. I have become more self-confident and also more mature in my writing. However, i have been lagging behind on my post by not putting my full effort into them and also by missing a couple in the past. Everything i said above is true. I am glad to have been able to blog the year and i will defiantly be keeping these posts up during the school year.

Monday, May 2, 2011

my peer review comments.

Ebone...

This was an awesome post even though the topic was hard. I too found it interesting that women have had high positions in the work force, and not only that but a women of african american descent. Also, you made f=good connections between the qoutes and how that relates. overall, nothing really to improve on, just little grammer or spelling mistakes but content wise, spot on.


Devin...

nice job talking about judjing a book by its cover. Also, nice comparison between the two books.

Meriam...

nice showing the strength of women's rights and independence. the only advice i would beside lenthen the post would be to really define the reltaitonship of women;s ndependence and history with women's independence today. i think that where you were trying to go with this.